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Two Haiku
by Joseph Suglia
The plural of haiku is haiku.
I
The frog leaps into the water:
My inexistent wife
Plays the flute.
II
The grapes dance;
The rats are in the barn
Eating the oats.
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Bluejays eat cat food;
El Niño will flood us all
In time for Christmas
Tis the season~
This is a good beginning, Linda, but I would remove the fourth line (does it belong to the haiku?). A haiku should not extend beyond the seventh syllable. Nonetheless, you do have a kiru and a kigo.
The interview was crazy in the video!!!!!!!!! What was that interviewer doing towards the end????!
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So much for the art; but all is not lost—this came in just this morning and I pass it along with a clear conscience*
Litter box not here
You must have moved it again
I’ll crap in the sink
* honi soit etc
Is that Synchronicity, or what? Boom boom!
(There were a whole heap more, if you’d like some of them?)(All about cats.)
where have I been
missing all this expertise
fell asleep again
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I will be back
please stay awhile longer
hark carol singers
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I have but one ask
critiques if you could please
think Christmas gifts
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Christmas new year
could i wait forever no
father time is near
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hope you get my drift
snow is deep still falling
life enshrined in ice
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now i have wrote some
hope I have done enough
ringing dam the phone
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Your probably a very busy Doctor, Joseph, but I hoping you can advise me on my ways in respect to the above, of course. Please forgive my impertinence, but I feel good in what I write, and I am wondering if that justifies me posting my work as is. Realising I have a lot to learn, eg I know what kigo is, (as in weather, its conditions, cold, warm, colours etc), but kiru, without dissecting the haiku above, not a clue. Whether I am right or wrong on the latter I need to learn. However I am finding there is controversy, an example, you say haiku is the plural as well as its singular, yet there are those that subscribe to haikui as the plural, confused, but not put off. Anyway hope you can help me in my endeavour to find perfection, in good faith – Mick
the best is always fleeting
the mountain sits still
snow marks the days of winter
the raindrops are exquisite
spring’s days grow longer
trees are always wanting more
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Beautiful haiku, Joseph. I have also tried to write some though I do not know if I have followed the poetic rules, haha:
how much do clouds weigh
when they carry heavy chains
oppressing our hearts
(from: https://momentsbloc.wordpress.com/2018/05/09/how-much-do-clouds-weigh/)
silence of violence
impregnates chambers of heart
shattered looking glass
(from: https://momentsbloc.wordpress.com/2018/05/24/silence-of-violence/)
your soft wind at last
removes the lonely sorrows
of forgotten past
(from: https://momentsbloc.wordpress.com/2018/05/22/your-soft-wind-at-last/)
rocks murdered wishes
yet resilient souls survive
gathered on May First
(from: https://momentsbloc.wordpress.com/2018/05/01/rocks-murdered-wishes/)
TL;DR.